8 thoughts on “2. Elements of a Good Writing

  1. I’m sorry Sir I’m late…

    Here are my assignment :

    1) The sentence which doesn’t has contribute with the paragraph are number 2,4 and 7.

    2) Research by social scientists indicates that the culture of the Americans is the most individualistic (or second most, after Australians) in the world. Their devotion to individualism is probably one of the most important characters of Americans. This fondness of individualism among Americans is quite natural. Childhood in American are trained to conceive of themselves as separate individuals. American children are taught that they can set their own aims and occupation in life, according to their inclinations. Americans assume that everyone else in the world is also devoted to individualism. Americans will be surprised if they encounter a person from abroad who seems to them excessively concerned with the opinions of their elders, with following traditions, or with fulfilling obligations to others. So, for Americans, such a person is trapped, weak, indecisive or overly dependent.

    Thanks & Regards

  2. Dear Sir,

    Below are my responses to the assignment of Writing II

    The following sentences which don’t contribute to unity of the first paragraph:
    (2) I’m now working as a public relation staff in a four-star-hotel.
    (4) Going to college is sometimes tiring.
    (7) It’s true that some high school graduates obtain reasonably good income in business.
    These sentences should be dropped out because they don’t support the main idea of the paragraph.

    (2) Research by social scientists indicates that the culture of the Americans is the most individualistic (or second most, after Australians) in the world. First of all, their devotion to individualism is probably one of the most important characters of Americans. This fondness of individualism among them is quite natural. Since their childhood, they are trained to conceive of themselves as separate individuals. For instance, children are taught that they can set their own aims and occupation in life, according to their inclinations. They also assume that everyone else in the world is also devoted to individualism. Therefore, they will be surprised if they encounter a person from abroad who seems to them excessively concerned with the opinions of their elders, with following traditions, or with fulfilling obligations to others. Indeed, for Americans, such a person is trapped, weak, indecisive, or “overly dependent.”

    Regards,
    Overman Gea

  3. Dear Mr. Parlin,
    Here is my assignment
    1. The sentences number 4 and 7 are not contribute to the unity of the pieces this paragraph.

    2. Since their childhood Americans are trained to conceive of themselves as separate individuals. American children are taught that they can set their own aims and occupation in life, according to their inclinations. Americans assume that everyone else in the world is also devoted to individualism. This fondness of individualism among American is quite natural. American will be surprised if they encounter a person from abroad who seems to them excessively concerned with the opinions of their elders, with following traditions, or with fulfilling obligations to others. Research by social scientists indicates that the culture of the Americans is the most individualistic (or second most, after australians) in the world. Their devotion to individualism is probably one of the most important characters of Americans. For Americans, such a person is trapped, weak, indecisive, or ”overly dependent.”

  4. Dear Mr. Parlin Pardede

    Here is my assignment

    1) I think the sentences number 2, 4, and 7 are not contribute to the unity of the piece this paragraph.

    2) Research by social scientist indicates that the culture of Americans is the most individualistic ( or second most, after Australians) in the world. Their devotion to individualism is probably one of the most important characters of Americans. This is still quite natural. Since their childhood Americans are trained to conceive of themselves as separate individuals and taught that they can set their own aims and occupation in life, according to their inclinations. Americans assume that everyone else in the world is also devoted to individualism. They will be surprised if they encounter a person from abroad who seems to them excessively concerned with the opinions of their elders, with following traditions, or with fulfilling obligations to other. For Americans, like a person is trapped, weak, indecisive, or “overly dependent.”

    Regards,
    Cipta

  5. Dear Mr. Parlin
    Here is my assignment:
    1. I think sentences number 4 and 7 are not contribute to the unity of the piece.
    2. Research by social scientists indicates that the culture of the Americans is the most individualistic (or second most, after Australians) in the world. Their devotion to individualism is probably one of the most important characters of Americans. This is quite natural. Since their childhood Americans are trained to conceive of themselves as separate individuals. They are taught to set their own aims and occupation in life according to their inclinations. They assume that everyone else in the world is also devoted to individualism. They will be surprised to encounter a person from abroad who seems excessively concerned with the opinions of their elders, with following traditions, or with fulfilling obligations to others. For Americans, such a person is trapped, weak, indecisive, or “overly dependent.”

  6. Dear Sir,
    This is my assignment,
    1. Sentences number 2, 4 and 7 are not contribute to the unity of the piece this paragraph.
    2. Their devotion to individualism is probably one of the most important characters of Americans. It’s quite natural. Since their childhood Americans are trained to conceive of themselves as separate individuals and taught that they can set their own aims and occupation in life, according to their inclinations. Americans assume that everyone else in the world is also devoted to individualism. They will be surprised if they encounter a person from abroad who seems to them excessively concerned with the opinions of their elders, with following traditions, or with fulfilling obligations to others. For Americans, such a person is trapped, weak, indecisive, or “overly dependent.” Research by social scientists indicates that the culture of the Americans is the most individualistic (or second most, after Australians) in the world.

  7. Dear Mr.Pardede

    Here is my assignment.
    1)The sentences I think do not contribute to the unity of the piece in paragraph are 2,4 and 7.

    2)Their devotion to individualism is probably one of the most important characters of Americans. Since their childhood Americans are trained to conceive of themselves as separate individuals. Therefore, American children are taught that they can set their own aims and occupation in life, according to their inclinations. Research by social scientists indicates that the culture of the Americans is the most individualistic (or second most, after Australians) in the world. This fondness of individualism among Americans is quite natural. Americans assume that everyone else in the world is also devoted to individualism. But, Americans will be surprised if they encounter a person from abroad who seems to them excessively concerned with the opinions of their elders, with following traditions, or with fulfilling obligations to others. Americans think such a person is trapped, weak, indecisive, or “overly dependent.”

    Regards,
    agustina.

  8. Dear all attendees of Writing 2,

    1) The following paragraph lacks unity because some sentences do not contribute to the main idea. Read the paragraph and decide which sentences that do not contribute to the unity of the piece.

    (1) My chief reason for coming to college was to prepare myself for a position that would allow me to actualize my potential in leadership and to have a higher income than I would be likely to obtain as a high school graduate. (2) I’m now working as a public relation staff in a four-star-hotel. (3) If I graduate with a bachelor degree, within fifteen years of graduation I will have a great opportunity to be promoted the public relation manager or at least to have a responsible position in management. (4) Going to college is sometimes tiring. (5) That means I can have a salary around 120 million rupiahs a year. (6) If I have only a high school diploma, the highest position I can eventually hope for is to become a manager-assistant at 50 to 60 million rupiah a year. (7) It’s true that some high school graduates obtain reasonably good income in business. (8) There is no doubt that a college education does provide far greater opportunity for self actualization and making more money at the same time.

    2) The following paragraph is good in idea but lacks of coherence. Rewrite it to produce a more coherent paragraph without changing the idea.

    Their devotion to individualism is probably one of the most important characters of Americans. Research by social scientists indicates that the culture of the Americans is the most individualistic (or second most, after Australians) in the world. This fondness of individualism among Americans is quite natural. Since their childhood Americans are trained to conceive of themselves as separate individuals. American children are taught that they can set their own aims and occupation in life, according to their inclinations. Americans assume that everyone else in the world is also devoted to individualism. Americans will be surprised if they encounter a person from abroad who seems to them excessively concerned with the opinions of their elders, with following traditions, or with fulfilling obligations to others. For Americans, such a person is trapped, weak, indecisive, or “overly dependent.”

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